段首句 1试卷给定，不计入词数
A few minutes later, the bear headed back to our
A few minutes later, the bear headed back to our camp, and we found the bear was more angry than before. It was very big and hit the fence hard. I was very afraid and my brain was empty, I didn't know what to do. Then, Elli thought of a good idea. She took some bread and throwed them out of the fence. Luckily, the bear stopped and went to eat the bread. But after a few minutes, the bear eated all the bread and it came back to us again.
段首句 2试卷给定，不计入词数
At that very moment, the helicopter
At that very moment, the helicopter arrived. Elli said happily, "We are safe now!" When the helicopter was on the ground, we quickly ran into it, we felt very happy. When the helicopter was fly in the sky, I looked out of the window. I saw the bear broke the fence and went to eat our other food. I took my camera quickly and take a photo of this. We were really lucky to escape from the dangerous bear.
这篇续写的优点是没有跑题，能顺着原文的危险场景写到获救；不足是语言基础错误较密，且很多句子只在交代“发生了什么”，没有把“危险有多近、人物有多紧张”写出来。当前主要任务不是堆高级词，而是先把过去时、动词结构和句子连接写准。然后把very afraid、very happy这类直白表达换成身体反应和动作链。
为什么是这一档
- 内容与原文融洽度基本合理：北极熊被胡椒喷雾赶走后又回到营地，继续攻击围栏，最后直升机到来，能接住原文“等待30分钟救援”和“围栏可能撑不住”的核心线索。主要不足是动作和心理描写偏概括，缺少紧张感的具体细节。
- 语言全篇大意能读懂，但语言处在简单叙述层面，反复使用very big、very afraid、very happy等直接词；同时有多处过去式、动词结构和句子粘连问题，部分句子需要重读才能理清关系。
分数怎么来的：
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She took some bread and throwed them out of the fence.
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改成：threw
throw 的过去式是不规则变化；续写叙述过去发生的动作，要用过去式 threw。
But after a few minutes, the bear eated all the bread and it came back to us again.
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改成：ate
eat 的过去式是不规则变化；这里讲熊吃完面包这一过去动作，要用 ate。
When the helicopter was fly in the sky, I looked out of the window.
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改成：was flying
was 后面不能直接接动词原形；表示直升机当时正在飞，要用过去进行时 was flying。
I took my camera quickly and take a photo of this.
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改成：took a photo
前面 I took my camera 是过去时，and 连接的并列动作也应保持过去时，所以 take 要改成 took。
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I was very afraid and my brain was empty, I didn't know what to do.
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改成：I was very afraid and my brain was empty, so I didn't know what to do
逗号前后都是完整句子，不能只用逗号硬连接；加 so 可以表示前因后果。
When the helicopter was on the ground, we quickly ran into it, we felt very happy.
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改成：we quickly ran into it, and we felt very happy
两个完整的主谓结构不能只用逗号连接；加 and 可把两个连续动作和感受并列起来。
I saw the bear broke the fence and went to eat our other food.
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改成：I saw the bear break the fence
see sb. do sth. 表示看见某人做了某事，see 后的宾语补足语要用动词原形 break。
先自己改一遍
She took some bread and throwed them out of the fence.
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改成：through the fence
面包是被扔过或穿过围栏，不是从围栏里面出来；这里用 through the fence 表示穿过围栏。
- 单词 · 准确性先把动词过去式写准范文用threw、finishing、took等正确形式替换throwed、eated、take，保证叙事时态统一。
- 句型 · 准确性避免句子粘连和动词结构错误范文把多个动作拆开或用从句连接，并把I saw the bear broke改成saw the bear break，使句子结构更清楚。
- 单词 · 复杂性用具体词替换very表达范文用huge paws、My heart beat wildly、with shaking legs来替代very big、very afraid、very happy，让情绪和场景更具体。
- 句型 · 多样性用非谓语组织动作链making the posts shake、Still trembling等结构把动作和状态连起来，比连续短句更流畅。
接下来按“先准确、再复杂、后多样”的顺序练，不要一开始就追求高级词。
- 第1步准确性先把第三档下半稳到第三档上半。
单词整理20个常见不规则动词过去式，优先记write-wrote、throw-threw、eat-ate、take-took、run-ran这类续写高频词。
句型每写完一句检查是否只有一个主干；如果有两个完整主谓，中间必须用句号、and、so、when等连接。
- 第2步复杂性准确性稳定后，可以从第三档上半冲到第四档。
单词把very afraid、very happy、very big替换成身体反应或具体名词，如my hands shook、let out a sigh of relief、huge paws。
句型练习“动作+结果”的句式：It hit the fence, making the posts shake；I lifted my camera and took one last photo。
- 第3步多样性在第四档内继续向上走，靠细节和句式变化拉开层次。
单词每段至少加入一个声音、动作或身体反应词，比如roar、shake、tremble、lower its head，让场景有画面。
句型避免连续使用主语+动词的短句，交替使用时间状语从句、现在分词短语和直接引语。